Name: Adam Ar-Rashid
Class: LG2201A
Semester: 1
Title: Jack Without Sally
Work Count: 285
Category: Poem
Brief Summary: When a guy says he isn't hurt inside, he's lying
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We Were Lucky, Because We Were Once Happy
Every Other Couple Seem To Suck, And We Were Like Jack And Sally
Our Bond And Chemistry Is Priceless, A Special Thing Of Beauty
On Top Of The World, Others Just Simpleton Peasants, We Were Mighty.
Now I am Just A Face In The Crowd, You Are A Complete Stranger
Hatred Had Now Overruled, And Love Is Something Cannot Be Lingered
Revenge May Seem Sweet, Because It Was Driven By Anger
Driven To The Escalation Point Where We Almost Traded Middle Fingers.
When The Dust Is Settled, All I Have Is Myself To Take The Lead
Although I Am Wondering Whether Someday The "Perfect Someone" I Will Meet
But Yet Somehow, I Was Able To Pick Up All The Broken Pieces
Eventhough I am Still In The Search For Someone To Share Blow Kisses.
The Future Seems Scary, Now That I Am Alone To Face It
Deep Inside, I Am Still Wondering That I May Not Be Able To Handle It
Make It To The End Without Having To Experience Another Heart Break
A Hope Of Smooth And Easy Love Without Any Toll To Take.
Jack And Sally, It Is All Now Just Another Sore Memory
Memories In The Past That Keep On Tempting Me Like Crazy
But I Am Stronger Now After That Beautiful Letdown
I Am Now Able To Cross The Ocean Of Doubt Without Being Drowned.
Sally, A "Thank You" You Don't Deserve But I Owed You I Guess
I Am Far Off Better Now Without You To Make A Mess
You Are Now Someone Whom Love I Should Not Confess
You Are Now A Scar Of What Used To Be Pain In My Ass.
EDITED BY: Maisarah binti Ahmad Kamil
2 comments:
Powerful, very powerful. The use of capital letters stresses each and every one of the words as it should be read, and it's just great. The starting is interesting - you'd never expect that it'd be a poem about breaking up. I guess that's what made the poem so powerful, really. Just reading how the persona viewed the relationship, and how that love turned into hatred so quickly. It's surprising, but it works.
I like how you touched on his feelings of survival after the break-up. It's true that some break-ups can bring the best out of people, or help them grow up and learn much more. It definitely seems as if the persona isn't in the middle of depression... quite opposite, actually. A nice poem overall! Keep it up!
thank you and add info, this poem is actually written 6 month after the break up which gave me enough strength to pull it together. thanks for the critics
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